Hai!~

Today before Bio SPA me and nerrin were in our school's library finding fics on ffn to laugh over. Saw this KHR one. 40 chaps, 331 reviews. Apparently CP read it before :O so she showed it to me...

I know it isn't easy to write fics, especially if you're new to the whole thing...but seriously? There's some where it's less the story, but more the author. OOC has a limit too you know?

Who the hell starts a fic, preaching PARAGRAPHS of stuff on how a novel is usually like and why it's not a drabble although it seems like one. And about how mafias aren't all about violence. When you post a fic on ffn, we want to read the fic. Not your bloody preaches. Do that on your blog or lj or something.

Majority of my f-list is made up of people who read/watch KHR, so tell me, how OOC is Hibari yelling, yes, yelling. "Idiot"? IMO, it's glaringly obvious.

A large portion of the population probably hates Mary-Sues. Who doesn't? You've probably never really met one before then...Who the hell asks at the end of the chapter, "is my OC mary-sue?" if you know ffn, majority of your reviews would be filled with people gushing, "OH WHAT AN ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL FIC! AND NO, YOUR OC IS WONDERFUL, ABSOLUTELY NOT MARY-SUE!" Self satisfication much? And after noticing your OC is Mary-Sue, she goes "Oh, i think TYL OC is mary-sue" Does she do anything about it? NO. Thinking's not gonna help girl, action plz.

So me and CP went to give her a 'nudge'...i mean come on, someone with that many reviews and still continuing her mary-sue OC must have a rather big head no? Oh wait, i forgot...the last straw.

"Somehow, i find that typing Yamamoto is annoying"

WELL. If it's that annoying, don't type his name. You're freaking sullying it!

Right...a bit of Yama-fangirl there, but not the point, i feel the same even if it was any other character.

Well, i hate anon flames, so i logged on (: Too bad the flame got deleted though =x Someone wrote in a review (wonder if it's the person herself, after all, it's an anon reviewer as well :O)

"My arent you a rude little brat~
If you dont like the story dont bother reading it. Also was it necessary to go and insult the author like that? Really, people like you tick me off >.>

Anywhos nice chapter~ Im totally confused though xD I hope you update soon ;D"

Yep. I'm a rude little brat, polite enough to log on and show you who i am (:

And what do i get in return? A flame/concrit? for my KWMS story .__. Thanks :D

"Check your grammar or get a beta reader.

Ex:

“'Kaichou~ 3'” Kaichou~ ... 3? Three? What? Did I miss something?

"She was almost done, the sports clubs had been very well behaved the past
week." This sentence is totally messed up. The two parts of the sentence
don't 'flow' together. The comma should be a semi-colon. Or rather, you
should keep the first part of the sentence and add something like "She was
almost done with cleaning," then put the rest of the sentence together with
the next sentence (your next sentence is also a sentence fragment).


It's great that you're one of the first people posting in the 'Maid Sama!'
category, but at least try to use correct grammar. :("

I'm sorry i forgot that ffn doesn't have "<" so my "<3" became a "3". I'm sorry that i don't have perfect english.

But i wished that person wasn't anon...i'd like to have replied, "thanks for pointing that out, i'll make sure i'll double check my grammar next time!"

I know my errors were blatantly obvious, but since you're at it, why not tell the other person down the road that it's "Licking Desserts", not "Licking Deserts"? I'm not saying anything bad about the other person's fic cause i liked it though...

Looking at this dear flame i got, i'm inferring that it comes from either the reviewer of our dear mary-sue author, or the author herself. Thanks dear friend, for increasing my review count! (: Not that it actually matters that much on ffn though.

Seriously, click here to see how bad it got...does something like this deserve so many reviews? .__.